Comments on the draft

[In retrospect, this is going to be an ugly way to multiply-edit a MS; perhaps we should have tried wiggio. Anyway, two full pages of text (taking into account title, headers, etc.) is only about 1900 words. Toss in a couple of figures and there's really no way to do a decent job with this report. Hopefully the editor is holding us to a strict 2-page limit on text only -- right now we're around 2800! ..CJ]

[it feels like, if we are not careful, we may get a camel. You know, the mouse designed by a committee.RM]

[Most of my suggestions are minor stylistic/grammar tweaks. Rather than try and insert them all here, even under the corresponding section, I've posted an edited version of the MS as a .pdf on my website [1]. Other comments I include below ..CJ]

I wish the best of luck to our uber-editors, Mike and Consuelo. RM

I hope we can find room for Chris' summary paragraph. It really capsulized what we were about. RM